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Pumpkin

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We don't really do Halloween in the UK, but I could not resist....
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Chad rolled the knarled pumpkin into the middle of the barn. Using the biggest carving knife that he could find in his aunt's kitchen he began to saw into the top of the gourd.

Reaching inside he pulled out handful after handful of seeds and bright orange pulp, which he dumped on the floor. Then with the stolen knife Chad began to carve the face.

Finally in the darkening barn he placed a flickering candle inside the head. Suddenly a malevolent face leared back at him. Above the torn gash of a mouth the pumpkin's cruel eyes regarded Chad.

"Mommy?"
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haha, Touché...

This is of course a new Phenotype. The Hallowdrabble...
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Kind of like the beginning of Kurt Kirchmeier's Unholy Fruit (DC54). I Like it.
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Nice. I like it.
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Phenopath wrote:"Mommy?"
"No... Master. Now be quite while I carve your brothers."
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Oh, that is a different interpretation. In my head Chad said 'Mommy'. How can I clarify that using zero more words?
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Why bother? It works both ways... Double your audience! :P
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It works best if the Jack says 'Mommy', like the hatchling birds who bond with the first creatures they see. I hadn't considered the alternative. But at least the two possibilities are plausible, unlike some drabbles that leave me completely guessing.
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Thats pretty awesome. Strong work.
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